https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D6OndYlLwXM&feature=youtu.be
Feedback from my last pitch: People liked that I gave my app a name, which I did not really think at the time of making the original pitch would have a large impact, but I am glad it did. Additionally, many people liked I mentioned my funding- since I am an unconventional type of company, it is important.
What I changed based on the feedback: Personally, I felt towards the end I went on a weird rant-y tangent, so I removed that portion from my pitch. I kept it short and simple, but still to the point. This go-around I felt less nervous, so I was able to do my pitch in less takes. Additionally, since I felt more comfortable I was able to use my hands more for emphasis on certain points.
*sorry about the location, I'm out of town in DC*
Hi Meg,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I think you chose a great outfit, very professional! Since you're in DC, I think you did the best you could with your location. You did seem to have an increase in your confidence and I'm glad you were able to utilize your hand gestures. I also think your name fits the app well, I had a difficult time coming up with my business as well. Overall, excellent job, it was the best one yet!
Hey Meg! Great job at recording your pitch. Your location surely did not stop you. I love how you posed a question to your audience and had viewers like me really thinking and engaged in every word you stated. This video did make you seem more comfortable compared to your last ones. You also seemed more well-versed in what services you are offering to your stakeholders. Overall you did an amazing job.
ReplyDeleteMeg,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job changing parts of your elevator pitch based on the feedback you got. Using hands for more emphasis makes a great difference because it adds more emotion and excitement to your pitch as well and that ends up making the audience feel that same emotion. It was also a good idea to keep it more short and simple since it is only a minute or so long so short and simple is the way to go. Overall great post and excellent adjustments!
Hey Megan,
ReplyDeleteCongratulations on that last pitch, honestly, it look like a professional presentation. The only thing that I don't know if its just me that noticed, is that it looked like you were reading it. Other than that, the attention grabber, the content, and closure inciting the public to feel welcomed was all great. Good job!